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Did you ever?

Posted: Mon Sep 26, 2005 5:08 am
by SleepyNguyen
Now that it's over, I wonder.
Did you ever really like me,
Accepting my confession
With a smile, so carefree.

You were always so kind,
Unable to resist.
Helping wherever,
Impossible to list.

You were always so giving,
I was a bit jealous.
Why did you never seem,
To care more about us.

I don't know what you felt,
Towards me when we're together.
I could never find out,
I could never be sure.

So I said those words,
Even if I still yearned.
Because I couldn't be sure,
If my feelings were returned.

"Let's break up..."
Desperately hoping you'd say no.
But you only smiled sadly,
SoI knew, it was time for us to go

It was the only chance,
To salvage our lost romance.

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Based on one of the chapters in the manga 'Salad Day's' A collection of short stories, centered around the same places. It actually ended alot happier than my poem did, but I wondered if the heroine didn't dowhat she did near the end, and I cut out one of the secondary characters altogether. Hope you enjoyed my poem.

Posted: Mon Sep 26, 2005 8:07 am
by DoRkiSH_AzN_bOiii916
deng tha was good...it flowed real smoothly.

Posted: Mon Sep 26, 2005 7:40 pm
by babydorkee
hekkkerz good. nice floww

Posted: Tue Sep 27, 2005 4:21 am
by dragon1290
wahh too good for me...

yea very nice flow =]

Posted: Fri Sep 30, 2005 9:42 pm
by Now_N_Forever
^--- exactly!

Posted: Sat Oct 01, 2005 4:20 am
by mui_mui
man too good O_O wanna do my english homework for me?! HAHHA J/K very flowing! i liked your rhyming(sp?).. very nice

Posted: Sun Jul 30, 2006 6:57 am
by froggyboy604
nice, the flow is nice.