My first ryhme in here

DJxChaos · Post by **DJxChaos** » Fri Apr 07, 2006 3:44 am

Lol hey Henry it's Hien i found my old forum account. Anyways here is my firt post for this forum

when i first saw sitting there
ure voice was all i can hear
you were like an angel from above
at that moment was when i fell in love
since then you were always in my heart
nothign could have torn us apart
but after that fateful night
i could no longer see ure light

thats all i got so far haha

Dah_jOkA · Post by **Dah_jOkA** » Fri Apr 07, 2006 3:48 am

haha wuddup wuddup,

not bad man, pretti slick, u got potential just work on ur flow a lil more, it doesnt seem to connect as much. overall its pretti ill for a beginner.,

PROPZ TO YA!

babydorkee · Post by **babydorkee** » Mon Apr 10, 2006 4:22 am

hehe i agree w/henry. nice rhymess. but u're missing a you in the first sentence hehe

Liddo Annie · Post by **Liddo Annie** » Mon Apr 10, 2006 6:53 am

Lol. Hi Hien <3.

yeah a word or two seems to be missing from the first line.

Post by **froggyboy604** » Sun Jul 30, 2006 6:29 am

i like it. nice job.